This is beautiful and very touching! It echoes of strength and yet of loneliness, and shadows that knowledge that we all feint, and that is that, we are all unique and alone, and never so much so as at death! Your lovely poem imparts that definite feeling of final separation from the physical world and going on alone to the afterlife!
Honestly, I can understand that this poem is about loss, and yet you don't really seem to communicate the actual anguish of loss very well. Like, your words are beautiful. You have a gift fro stringing certain words together to make them sound beautiful and poetic, but what I think you lack is feeling. Hope that helps. Now, please be cool and comment some of my stuff! =]