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    dots Submission Name: Sometimesdots

    Author: Charles F Kane
    ASL Info:    34
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 4/17/14
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Sometimes I'm mad
    Sometimes I'm crazy
    Sometimes the world doesn't make sense
    Sometimes everything's just hazy
    Like i'm on the other side of a brick wall
    Can't even hear your frantic call

    Sometimes I'm paranoid
    Sometimes I'm insane
    Sometimes it's like the world
    gives me nutting but shit and pain
    crawling around in the mud and gutter
    making me choke and sputter

    Sometimes I'm groovy
    Sometimes I'm cool
    Sometimes it feels like
    I'm anything but a fool
    But that's just an illusion, a dream
    shattered like glass, I scream

    Sometimes I'm nothing
    Sometimes I'm noone
    Bloody invisible to everybody
    better I was dead and gone
    I'm walking like the dead anyway
    No matter what I do or say


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      You should work on your rhythm and flow a wee bit. You could also work on your rhyme just a tad. Also try to tie in you subject a little more.
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by causticprincess | [ Reply to This ]

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