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    dots Submission Name: "A Dream Come True"dots
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    Author: PrettyRicki
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 29/49/11
    Words: 374
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I spent 2 years of my life in a relationship that I can only describe as hell. Arguments every day. Went from being lied to, to cheated on and the list goes on and on. Once that chapter closed in my life, a new one opened and I have honestly never been so happy in my life. This person has made me happy to wake up. To hear their voice, makes me smile from ear to ear. I've never felt like this before. And for the past year, they have been my heart, and they will continue to be. I love them very dearly so...this is for them.


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    ďA Dream Come TrueĒ

    In the past, Iíve been hurt,
    In more ways than one,
    Plenty times where I thought
    That my end had begun

    But when you came along,
    In August of last year,
    You became the missing piece,
    That I now hold so dear,

    You became my rock,
    My shoulder and my ear,
    The one Iíd lay down and die for,
    The one who catches my tears

    I make it a point,
    To thank God every night,
    Iíve been through so many wrongs,
    But this is just so right,

    Youíve showed me what it is,
    To love and be loved,
    To sacrifice it all,
    When push comes to shove,

    Your different than the rest,
    You actually care about me,
    Not the things I can do for you,
    And its really made me see;

    That I have someone special,
    The true love of my life,
    The one I lay dreaming about,
    When I lay down at night,

    I put my head on the bed,
    And lay down to rest,
    I pull my pillow close,
    And hold it tight to my chest,

    I stare at your picture,
    And tears fill my eyes,
    Youíve made me so happy,
    I canít help, but cry

    And I think to myself,
    ďWow, dreams do come true,Ē
    I already have my proof,
    Because my dream was you!

    So I want you to know,
    That whenever you feel down,
    I might not be beside you,
    But Iím always around,

    And just remember this:
    Youíre my world and my heart,
    Youíve always been down for me,
    Right from the start,

    So know that I love you,
    More than words could say,
    And that my love only gets stronger,
    With the passing of each day,

    And when you cry, I cry,
    But know that Iíll dry your tears,
    Iíll be there to lean on,
    And wipe away your fears,

    You have the key,
    To my heart and my soul,
    No one can take that from you,
    You alone play that role,

    Youíre my heart, my world,
    My lover and my friend,
    The one I care so much for,
    And Iíll love you Ďtill the end!




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      this is so beautiful!! how amazing it must feel for you to have found a love like that. you have described the emotion you feel so well, it's clear that you adore her. i'll bet she wept with joy when she read this!!
    great job,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-17 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      OMFG.. How sweet! Not many guys express how they feel about a certain someone like you did. But.. it would be great if they did that once in a while..

    Well, in this peice, you described how you felt about your new relationship. It says so much about the emotions you have. Reading this, I could feel your happiness and love for her. You guys must really care for each other!

    Yea.. bad relationships really suck.. but once you find somebody else, they change you forever. And yes, being cheated on and lied to really hurts. But I'm so glad you found somebody!

    Great Job!
    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]
      You love purely. That is what this shows. And you love freely. This is what I have seen. You write in a way that expresses emotions that are some times hard to speak upon. Yet, so easy to write about. Those are the complicated emotions.

    This person that you have found....I hope you continue to carry this bond with. Some loves are very hard to come by.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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