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La matanza de a esa mujer en el espejo

Author: Twisted
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Part one. I kinda got lazy,'s short, you'll have to wait for the next installment of
" La matanza de a esa mujer en el espejo"

La matanza de a esa mujer en el espejo

La matanza de a esa mujer en el espejo
(Translates to “Killing that woman in the mirror”)

By: Adrieanna Coco


She screamed, throwing the glass across the room, and smiled as it shattered. There was another glass that was broken at her hand in place of the one on her wall.

‘ You stupid woman. Just torturing yourself needlessly. All you need to do is listen to me.’

“ No.” She shook her head. “ Hell no. You’re the reason I’m in here. You told me to kill him.” She screamed, laughing to herself. “ Why won’t you ever go away and just die?”

‘Because I am apart of you. How do you kill apart of yourself?’

“ I’ll get help.”

Again that woman in the mirror smiled. ‘ They all think you’re crazy. Why would you tell them something like that?’

“ I’ll break you.” She whispered.

‘And allow me the control you so desperately desired, but is too damn weak to go after it.’

“ I am not. I...mean…I don’t want it. You’re evil. I hate you, die!”

‘ Oh, tsk, tsk, that won’t so now will it? You don’t hate me, you hate yourself for relying on me. For knowing it’s me that can take it, that can kill, that can completely relish in the victory.’

She covered her ears, grasping her hair as well trying to block her words. “ No, I don’t enjoy the kills. They…oh god, how could you?”

‘I’m heartless. I enjoy there screams. Don’t you?’

She panted for air. “ Yes, I mean no!”

Another laugh filled her cell. ‘ I know you do, because I do.’

“ I’m nothing like you.”

‘ Are you trying to convince me or yourself? You’re right though, you should be the one in this mirror.’

“ No, oh, god no.” She looked around the cell wildly.

‘ I will break you.’

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  The title caught my eye,
I love languages, doenst matter which one it is. I think its spanish, but I'm not sure. mujer means woman, and el espejo in the mirror?
esa must be 'that' and matanza must be the killing part then?
Anyway. the title is cool in both languages, but maybe if you had given ity the english title, more people would've read this.

I came back to your page to give you comments back. sorry it took me so long.
Sometimes when I look through people's work, it takes me a long time to comment on somerthing I like, but this one was the first I looked at, so that's a good thing.

Anyway, this was cool. This is the kind of texts I'm interested in. Conflicts with the mirror, leaviong open spaces to the reader what's happening, good job.
This reminded me about something I wrote a year ago btw, maybe you'll like it, it's called Mirror on the Wall.
It's not like me to leave comments without any critiques, but I can't think of something useful so ;)

keep it up,

| Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it. keep it up.
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
schzophrenia is the party that's going on. break the mirror and the game will end.
| Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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