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    dots Submission Name: A Markdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Markdots
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    Though my words were few
    I hoped they were heavy enough
    to leave some kind of mark
    whether it be a crater or a wound.





    Submitted on 2004-05-23 11:45:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Angry. The poem is short and to the point, Curt even. Just like angry words are supposed to be. I mean, of course you could tirade, but--sometime it isn't necessary. like here. good write
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the concise way this carries over the raw emotion. This is one case in which a little more structure might be usefull. In particular, if you could write this in haiku, it would make such a statement of rebellion that it would be impossible to ignore, as haiku is mostly used for inspirational thoughts, it would highlight the anger/resentment. Very well expressed as it is though.
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      wow thats wonderful. i love it. dont think u need to change a thing. i think wound sounds fine. smiles ange....hope to read more from u soon
    | Posted on 2004-05-23 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]


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