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Sisterly Love

Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 192
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is a poem I wrote for my brother it's pretty straight forward and simple

Sisterly Love

So close yet so far apart
This love just wrecks my heart
Your here at the worst of times
So where are you during the best years of my life
Miles away into the deep cold unknown
Way up North were nobody goes
Is a place you call home
Just an opinon even more so an inner thought
Stay here with me we could rock!
But I guess it's up to you what you want to do
I have to stop mothering you
Not like it's a bad thing
But it's not so good
When I see your face so blue
And your world fall apart
But what can I do other then be the fool
Who always has your back for you
Being mad I could never do
Until you pull a stupid stunt and fly the coop
But what more should I do
Sit around and wait for you
Til yoou finally figure out what to do
I just want you to see this from my point of veiw
Being younger out of us two
Just realize what you put me through
Before you finally decide what to do!

Submitted on 2006-09-19 00:07:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  So what did your brother think of the poem you wrote for him?
Hope he liked it like we do!
| Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like how you are able to have the abitlity to write something like this to show that other people and yourself as well need to let are brothers and sisters know that we love them and how much they really mean to us

| Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi .. I too have a sister that lives far from me... I miss her so.... Your poem helped me to figure out what to write about next.... I will start a poem about my sister, my best friend... I liked reading yours.. and I could feel the pain of missing her that you feel... I liked the bit of rhyme in it... Thank you for sharing with us... Desi..
| Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]

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