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    dots Submission Name: Sisterly Lovedots

    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is a poem I wrote for my brother it's pretty straight forward and simple

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    dotsSisterly Lovedots

    So close yet so far apart
    This love just wrecks my heart
    Your here at the worst of times
    So where are you during the best years of my life
    Miles away into the deep cold unknown
    Way up North were nobody goes
    Is a place you call home
    Just an opinon even more so an inner thought
    Stay here with me we could rock!
    But I guess it's up to you what you want to do
    I have to stop mothering you
    Not like it's a bad thing
    But it's not so good
    When I see your face so blue
    And your world fall apart
    But what can I do other then be the fool
    Who always has your back for you
    Being mad I could never do
    Until you pull a stupid stunt and fly the coop
    But what more should I do
    Sit around and wait for you
    Til yoou finally figure out what to do
    I just want you to see this from my point of veiw
    Being younger out of us two
    Just realize what you put me through
    Before you finally decide what to do!

    Submitted on 2006-09-19 00:07:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So what did your brother think of the poem you wrote for him?
    Hope he liked it like we do!
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you are able to have the abitlity to write something like this to show that other people and yourself as well need to let are brothers and sisters know that we love them and how much they really mean to us

    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi .. I too have a sister that lives far from me... I miss her so.... Your poem helped me to figure out what to write about next.... I will start a poem about my sister, my best friend... I liked reading yours.. and I could feel the pain of missing her that you feel... I liked the bit of rhyme in it... Thank you for sharing with us... Desi..
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]

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