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    dots Submission Name: Lost Againdots

    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is a rewrite of a poem I submitted some time ago... New title too.. Hope you enjoy reading it....

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    dotsLost Againdots

    Hearts broken, forever in pain,
    Nothing remains, but memories of
    A love we can never regain.

    Where butterflies once fluttered,
    Now a heart empty it will never be the same…

    Who can we blame?
    We knew it could never be, but yet
    We were drawn to one another,
    You and me…

    I, not free to be what you wanted
    Me to be..
    Though I tried, and I loved you so,
    I had to let you go..

    To fly in the sky with the other butterflies,
    While I cry for a love that lies within me,
    Not free, not me, forever in pain, forever
    I remain, never to regain
    A love lost again…

    Submitted on 2006-09-19 03:45:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      We all search for a soulmate in life, and most of us fall short. I think only a lucky few achieve that goal. Life batters one soul a lot, and sometimes two souls too much!

    This is a remarkable poem, written with honesty and poetic remorse. I think it touched many hearts with a knowing theme.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem, although a bit sad... you are a good writer, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with strator. it was good poem but i had to reread it too. the format makes it a little harder to understand in some places. good job on it though.

    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by sweetme16 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem. It flowed pretty well...except I had to re-read it a couple of times. Only because of the format you used. It kind of made it hard to read and get the first time.
    If you fix some of the Stanzas, I definitely think that will make it better. Otherwise, it's a pretty good write.

    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]

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