Well, I liked the poem, mainly because of its sound and ease of reading. I'm not sure - oh, heck, I am sure - that I would not have known what it was about had you not put it in the description. And the title would not have been a tip-off. If that's okay with you, then it's okay with me. I have no suggestions for this poem, so this isn't particularly helpful to you. I'm sorry about that. But I did enjoy it. mae
That first stanza is amazing. AMAZING! Like, it's just too cool. I really like the rest, but, wow, they just seem to pale in comparison to that first stanza. In a way, I think that first stanza almost hurts the rest of the poem, because, as I said, the other two stanzas are good, but they never reach the level of the first. I don't know... yeah. I like the use of different "mis-" words in the each third-line of the poem. You executed that very well. Yep, I liked this though.