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    dots Submission Name: When the packagae is pretty ...dots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 345
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 740
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    dotsWhen the packagae is pretty ...dots
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    When the package is pretty, no one cares whats inside - Lolavie
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    Suddenly caught
    in between the stench of reality
    and the beautiful aroma of the fairytale life

    How I was brought
    is a surprise to me, believe me
    but I cant help but to think that I belong here

    Wandering
    the world of my heart's desires
    with many imitations
    Experiencing
    the taste of fire
    just meets my expectations

    Im here
    and you're right in front of me
    but glass is in between
    I cant feel you but I can see
    and its been drivin me crazy, lately

    You're there
    without a clue of what I want
    the thought of you is taunting me
    I cant feel you but I see
    and its been drivin me crazy, lately

    Dont understand
    why things like this happens to me
    Is fate just so unfair to make me forever lonely

    Cant comprehend
    its all a surprise to me, believe me
    but I cant help but to think this's how it'll be

    Understand
    the world of my heart's desires
    has many imitations
    The experience
    of tasting fire
    can meet my expectations

    Im here
    and you're right in front of me
    but glass is in between
    I cant feel you but I can see
    and its been drivin me crazy, lately

    Youre there
    without a clue of what I mean
    the thought of you is taunting me
    I cant feel you but I see
    and its been drivin me crazy, lately

    Lately,
    Ive been feeling like
    this glass is in my mind
    I can flee from this state of mind
    and I will be right.....

    Right here
    and ure right in front of me
    no glass lies in between
    I can feel you and I can see
    and everythings how its supposed to be

    Youre there
    You know exactly what I need
    the thought of you inspires me
    Cause I can feel you and I can see
    and everythings how its supposed to be




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