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    dots Submission Name: clashdots
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    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 358
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 918
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2113



    Description:
       i used to rap so every now and then people ask me to clash an ive declined alot and i felt like accepting one and i appently still have my flow :P i won by the way i might start raping again it was a freestyle but most of it i remembered it was much longer than whats here


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    yeh im back on your block
    stopping a nigger like stopping a clock
    i hate boys dat get me mad
    run up in the yard and take every thing they had
    mesy yer im making a mess
    squezzing on your wifies brest
    writing a rhyme is easy
    stop the chat cos your breth smells cheesy
    so sick im uneasy
    just way to greezie
    yer your flows unique
    oh so shit is that a technique
    when i see you on road you will get bang
    think your sick cos you can talk in slang
    youll get hang
    spray up your yard den u'll get prang
    but still im on a downlow
    no more time not smoking crow
    doing dat will make ya mind slow
    still think your a g
    ill play you just like cd
    blud you think your funny
    youll get eat like the easter bunny
    girls like me cos im sweet like hunny
    yeh im just way to smooth
    any were i go im bussing a groove
    fast like a sniper
    stap up fast like im bare hyper
    fighting ill aim for your head
    merking you untill your dead
    im so nasty im scared of my self
    slewing your pointy ears like your an elf
    put your shit rhymes back on the shelf
    im so sick i can get sicker
    you and you boys will get eat like a snicker
    mans got eyes on you
    not one but two
    go home its time for dinner
    heads spining like beyblade
    but your not a spinner
    you will get merk cos im always the winner
    after me your be left buring liek the kfc zinger
    m.e yeh thats me s to the y
    got guys getting merked time after time
    yer this is my standard
    not levels im talking bout flags
    holding down blocks merking off faggs
    blud your face looks mashed
    bet you your sorry we ever clashed
    blud i got heads turning
    still talking not learning
    blud your age dont matter
    stright to the point ima make you shatter
    lyrics from me its mind over matter
    swarming you with words like cod in a batter




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      wow, rak i gotta hand it too you.you got them ryhmes in the bag sooo fast it made my head spin.i read it three times just to make sure i understood everything.man oh man i'd be scared [censored]less if someone said this to me.
    i know it wasn't ment to be toward me, but i just put myself in that position to see how it felt.
    any way i can tell you really put a lot of feeling and truth into this one.and the way you spelled everything added alot of intrest to it.you really did a fine job on this one.
    *jenn*
    | Posted on 2006-10-14 00:00:00 | by bbcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      Rakeem
    Yeah my Friend you do have skillz
    I like the flow of this there was no steady brakes and it carried very well
    PLUS
    when one reads this a second time it all comes together perfectly centering on one theme
    Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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