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    dots Submission Name: if you wanna leavedots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 839
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 374



    Description:
       something i was feeling at the time.


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    dotsif you wanna leavedots
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    If you wanna leave
    Go ahead Iím not gonna stop you
    As soon as you say those words
    Weíre over, weíre through
    It was good while it lasted
    But now you and me are done
    You proved me very wrong
    You werenít the one
    So pack your bags
    Leave the keys behind
    Donít worry about me
    Iíll be just fine.




    Submitted on 2006-09-19 16:52:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can really feel the pain even though it seems that you are trying to convey you dont care excellent job keep writing.
    writing has the ability to take you far away from the pain i enjoyed reading this.
    | Posted on 2006-11-29 00:00:00 | by puppet | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, The words that you have in this poem speak of pain and angst, sometimes it really sucks what guys do to us. Just remember to keep your chin up and remember that life isn't all that bad, I mean sometimes it sucks but, if there is one thing that I have been taught, it's that there is always a "silver lining" I know that it sounds tacky, but, life is like that, there are good times and bad ones, just keep on writing and remember to never change for anyone, you are great the way you are, and if they can't handle that, then they aren't good enough to even be considered "friends". keep writing,


    Samantha
    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Sharati_hottie | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is ether a easy brake up or the morning after a one night stand. or a little of both. but it feels like a the reader wants to say something else but won't or can't.
    Am I any where close?

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-10-07 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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