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    dots Submission Name: Thinking of himdots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       a poem inspired by Robert


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    dotsThinking of himdots
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    Thinking about him
    Is sort of like this
    Remember the look in his eyes
    The first time we kissed
    The passion I felt
    Almost to much to write
    But thatís what I feel
    As I think of him tonite
    The way his skin feels
    The way time stood still
    Itís all good but
    I fein for him too much
    The way he looks at me
    The way that he talks
    The way that he smells
    Even the way that he walks
    So as I sit here
    With my paper and pen
    Remember today that
    I always think of him




    Submitted on 2006-09-19 16:52:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi , great write! , its got a nice flow and perfectly describes the feelings , how we love thinking of him, the question "is he thinking of me?" keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by tammytompkins | [ Reply to This ]


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