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Cereal!


Author: darkwiccan14
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Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Comedy
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uh something weird! i was bored!


Cereal!



Cereal, Cereal!
The best ones are Cheerios!
Gimmee the ones that are so splendid!
But don't gimmee Fruity pebbles,
because then I'd be Offended!

Cereal! Cereal!
uh, now i'm full of friggen Cheerios...
and now i don't want anymore cereal!




Submitted on 2006-09-19 21:04:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Can't connect with this. The notion of cereals as basis for poems is mega-grand but the execution here needs more thought. OK so we all toss the odd thing off but perhaps we keep them to ourselves.
| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]
  cheerios dont fill u up. have some pizza.
| Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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