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    dots Submission Name: Priest's Dirty Secretdots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 22
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 760
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       Short and to the point, couldn't find anything else to write after 4 lines...leaves alot to the imagination so I like it.

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    dotsPriest's Dirty Secretdots

    He kissed his little holy book
    As he turned and walked away
    Uttering his final prayer
    For everyone he had slain

    Submitted on 2006-09-20 01:06:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      short, simple, yet not too sweet. i like it. i really enjoy reading your work. i really hope you keep posting. you are an amazing writer. keep it up. you're doing great.

    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, just wow. I loved it! so simple i wanna hear more. it brightned my day, thanks. take care.
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Yoki | [ Reply to This ]
      This was nice, it seems like a good first lines for starting a piece, it has that intrigue to get your readers. It would be nice to see you continue it see how it develops.

    Be Blessed,
    | Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      So, was the holy book a porno mag?
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]

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