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    dots Submission Name: given updots

    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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       not really a poem just me going on and on

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    dotsgiven updots

    hit the pillow never return
    dissapear,over and done

    is it ok if im a life drop out?
    if I give up,give in,quit the fight?

    sounds so dumb and so weak
    I am weak,I am dumb

    just dont wanna wake up every morning
    just wanna sleep
    forever at peace

    no more pain
    no more hurt
    no more confussion
    or stress

    sleep in a world of blank
    a world of nothing
    the world of done

    no one would notice no one would care
    no,they would care,theyd be happy
    I would be gone
    the faliure,the burden
    no longer here

    I dont no
    dont really care
    the only thing that stops me is I dont no what would be waiting on the other side
    in the world of death

    so again goes to show
    I am weak
    I am afraid
    want to be sheltered from the world

    but would that be enough
    no id hve to be sheltered from myself

    Submitted on 2006-09-20 07:35:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ive been like this. this piece is more like you ranting in a poetic way. very common. but also not too shabby. turned out pretty good. and btw, ppl would miss you. you just dont realize it.

    im gonna stop here for now, ill continue either later or tomorrow. so far im impressed by your early work.
    | Posted on 2010-09-17 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the feelings interpreted but it was kind of vague. Say what you mean.
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Logic | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. It's pretty good. I've felt that way many times. It's really weird how i can see my feelings put up in a poem as someone else's work. Isn't it?
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Dead_inside | [ Reply to This ]

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