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    dots Submission Name: Freshly Stolen Childdots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Misc/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 570
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 471



    Description:
       Not really POETRY. More of one of me telling one of my friends that "you had sex with him then he dumped you? get used to it life sucks"


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    dotsFreshly Stolen Childdots
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    Holding your hand
    kissing your lips,
    saying they love you
    always being there

    It all turns out the same,
    your heart is broken
    you handed away your innocense.
    For what?

    Now you feel worthless
    annother slab of meat on the table
    nobody cares
    It happens all the time

    Learn my child,
    trust none of them
    this is life,
    get used to it.





    Submitted on 2006-09-20 09:15:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well......[censored] that guy......dumbass.....but not all guys are like that just most.....and i like writings like this one, that arent really poetry or anything just random writings...nice
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      that was really good. i usually don't like not rhyming poetry but i like this 1. who is it about? sum1 i know or sum1 4rm jefferson?
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by bloodydreamer27 | [ Reply to This ]


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