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    dots Submission Name: Silver Devildots
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    Author: rememberplaydoh
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 78/102/60
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSilver Devildots
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    Little silver menace,
    you sit and stare at me,
    a contrivance of the devil
    designed to steal my sleep.

    Your glaring mirror-eyes
    reflect all that you see,
    each smile that's caught in them
    is turned back, and laughs at me.

    You wicked little tyrant,
    you rule both day and night
    but oddly, though I hate you
    when you're gone, I'm not alright.

    I miss hearing your singing,
    the tones both high and low.
    I feel I need you with me
    going everywhere I go.

    You could be my salvation
    when I'm feeling quite alone,
    or your voice could bring great pain
    but that's not you -- you're just my phone.




    Submitted on 2006-09-20 11:54:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, you totally got me there. I was wondering about the title for a little while trying to figure out what this thing was all about. Throughout the entire piece, i was still trying to figure out what this silver devil was all about and then Bang, there it was right in the very last line. Great method.

    It's true, the phone can bring you such joy yet at the same time such pain that in the end, you're wondering if it's the answer to your prayers or simply a curse that people have invented. I know how this feels because whenever my b/f is out and he didn't call me yet, it just keeps me awake wondering when he's going to call. Sometimes, that voice on the other line is all i need to hear or sometimes to just hang up on. Yet it's not the phone itself but it is that other person on the line.

    Overall, i believe this one really did catch me as a surprise. I enjoyed this one very much.

    ~Irina
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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