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    dots Submission Name: Something Meaningfuldots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    My face captured in your eyes like mirrors.
    Reflecting back at me all my fears.
    I am afraid to take a certain chance.
    Who knows if it will be a great romance.
    I know now my heart can withstand the fire.
    The flameís your flicking eyes of sapphire.
    Hopefully more than emptiness is in your arms.
    Iím engulfed in all your womanly charms.
    To others you may annoy.
    At least you know who you are and that I enjoy.
    My eyes dart around your face possessed.
    I want to take your hands and hold them tight against my chest.
    I have a lot to say but I contain it in verse.
    Every meeting with you in my mind I rehearse.
    I want to immerse and intermingle in each others souls.
    Now, I understand only the imperfect diamonds can transform from coals.
    I will stand against my own surmise.
    If it means that I can forever remain in your flawless eyes.




    Submitted on 2004-01-27 15:24:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great imagery Perhaps this could've gone in the Love category.. I -really- like how you went back to the eyes again in the last line, since you mentioned them in the first line. I like how you use "flawless" in your poem also. Nice :).
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by PastelSky | [ Reply to This ]
      "only the imperfect diamonds can transform from coals".... I like that thought. Cause I certainly am imperfect.
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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