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    dots Submission Name: Love/Wardots

    Author: hammyj
    ASL Info:    21/m/Notts UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 130/81/21
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
    Total Views: 808
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 472

       Again don't know why or what but hope you enjoy!!

    Stems from just thinking that maybe alls not the same with love and war

    Why can love be warred but war cannot be loved!

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    All is fair in Love and War,
    You conquered me, you came, i saw
    A love so deep, i knew for sure
    Why did you have to change the score?

    Battles, fights we are at war
    I remember calling you a whore
    I hated it , it made me sore
    You were everything i lived for

    Feelings weep from every pore
    Feel so cold down to the core
    I never felt so low before
    All's not fair in Love and War!!

    Submitted on 2006-09-20 13:50:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Personaly I liked the whole damn thing... it moved me right off of my bed and into the living room...
    | Posted on 2007-06-16 00:00:00 | by Cricket | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one full of feeling and is not a piont that most ppl can relait.
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Cokesu | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, I especially like the ending. Although, you had a good rhyming scheme going on there, but the beginning hardly follows it.

    "All is fair in Love and War,
    You conquered me, you came, i saw
    A love so deep, i knew for sure
    Why did you have to change the score?"

    Perhaps you could change "saw" to something that rhymes with war? It would make it sound a lot better.
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]

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