Description: i realy do some times hear my slef speaking with no control it happend today and it gave me a spark of something might be crap but im fucked right now so i dunno
so many voices in my head
each one telling me I’m meant to be dead
some times I hear them talking
cant control it I feel my legs walking
loosing control to these voice’s
fighting back but loosing to their inevitable choices
I feel them taking over
preaching to each other like they just found their holy clover
getting told that I’m just a host
these voice will make the once me a ghost
becoming a voice in my head
telling the once me they wish they were dead
I feel this endless insanity
lifelessness in side this carcass lack of humanity
I know that the voice’s love this
sending them self’s in to a abyss
rocking now I see myself
this horror novel life putting pages on its shelf
given up this is the end
to the voices in my head I call best friends
Nice; [censored]in' ill, man! Not feeling like that of course, but the write. Disturbed actaully has a [censored]in' kick ass song called "voices" on there debut album. So that's kinda why this one drew me out. Anyhow, great use of discriptiveness so that others who haven't been there may understand what you're referring to. Fair articualtion as well. I would however give it an alternate format, it could strengthen it, as well as punctuation marks, and a little color additve. Maybe use some more colorful sysnonyms that'll enhance it, without taking away the meaning. Be chill man, nice
I have voices as well and when I don't like what they are saying I tune them out. It's easy all you have to do is listen to something else that's louder. I like the flow of it though. The devil could be in your head but all you have to do is banish him.
My thoughts? Are you sure you want them... there are pleanty after reading this. First of all you do have voices: we all do. They help us decifer good from bad--if we listen. The ones telling you to die, I'm not so sure about them. It scares me that you let the voices rule you. There are two sets, the evil and the good. The difficulty is deciiferinga nd following the correct one. Please don't give up!
Submission Name: voices
