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    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 853
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 950



    Description:
       i realy do some times hear my slef speaking with no control it happend today and it gave me a spark of something might be crap but im fucked right now so i dunno


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    so many voices in my head
    each one telling me Iím meant to be dead
    some times I hear them talking
    cant control it I feel my legs walking

    loosing control to these voiceís
    fighting back but loosing to their inevitable choices
    I feel them taking over
    preaching to each other like they just found their holy clover

    getting told that Iím just a host
    these voice will make the once me a ghost
    becoming a voice in my head
    telling the once me they wish they were dead

    I feel this endless insanity
    lifelessness in side this carcass lack of humanity
    I know that the voiceís love this
    sending them selfís in to a abyss

    rocking now I see myself
    this horror novel life putting pages on its shelf
    given up this is the end
    to the voices in my head I call best friends







    Submitted on 2006-09-20 15:21:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice; [censored]in' ill, man! Not feeling like that of course, but the write. Disturbed actaully has a [censored]in' kick ass song called "voices" on there debut album. So that's kinda why this one drew me out. Anyhow, great use of discriptiveness so that others who haven't been there may understand what you're referring to. Fair articualtion as well. I would however give it an alternate format, it could strengthen it, as well as punctuation marks, and a little color additve. Maybe use some more colorful sysnonyms that'll enhance it, without taking away the meaning. Be chill man, nice
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      I have voices as well and when I don't like what they are saying I tune them out. It's easy all you have to do is listen to something else that's louder. I like the flow of it though. The devil could be in your head but all you have to do is banish him.
    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
      My thoughts? Are you sure you want them... there are pleanty after reading this. First of all you do have voices: we all do. They help us decifer good from bad--if we listen. The ones telling you to die, I'm not so sure about them. It scares me that you let the voices rule you. There are two sets, the evil and the good. The difficulty is deciiferinga nd following the correct one. Please don't give up!
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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