Nice; [censored]in' ill, man! Not feeling like that of course, but the write. Disturbed actaully has a [censored]in' kick ass song called "voices" on there debut album. So that's kinda why this one drew me out. Anyhow, great use of discriptiveness so that others who haven't been there may understand what you're referring to. Fair articualtion as well. I would however give it an alternate format, it could strengthen it, as well as punctuation marks, and a little color additve. Maybe use some more colorful sysnonyms that'll enhance it, without taking away the meaning. Be chill man, nice
I have voices as well and when I don't like what they are saying I tune them out. It's easy all you have to do is listen to something else that's louder. I like the flow of it though. The devil could be in your head but all you have to do is banish him.
My thoughts? Are you sure you want them... there are pleanty after reading this. First of all you do have voices: we all do. They help us decifer good from bad--if we listen. The ones telling you to die, I'm not so sure about them. It scares me that you let the voices rule you. There are two sets, the evil and the good. The difficulty is deciiferinga nd following the correct one. Please don't give up!