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    dots Submission Name: When Is Say When...dots
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    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Rant/The pain inside
    Total Views: 807
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 722



    Description:
       This is about the fact that I can be an asshole.


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    dotsWhen Is Say When...dots
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    You're fool enough to be
    but you will never see.
    You'll never understand the "why's" of it
    until your hit painfully.
    And that's when you'll know your luck is shit.
    So shut the fuck up boy...dont speak, just sit.
    Because you're always fucked
    and you're never clean.
    Your only a loser doomed to repeat
    this melo-dramatic manevolent dream.
    Which is the burden that's burrying me.
    Silent is the voice of your own honesty.
    If your so fucking eager for eternity...
    Then sell-out your life
    cause death is for free...
    ...YOU FUCKING PUSSY!!!!!!!





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      VERY original. i liked it, but i figured it might be alittle bit longer because of its title, but okay i'm fine with that. I'm gonna stalk Ya!!!

    ~MaGgIe
    | Posted on 2007-06-23 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this before... don't know why I didn't comment though.
    I love it.

    The whole thing is wonderful, but I think my favorite part is:
    "Silent is the voice of your own honesty.
    If your so [censored] eager for eternity...
    Then sell-out your life
    cause death is for free..."

    That is gorgeous.

    Being an a**hole is not necessarily a bad thing.


    I love it when people use profanity in stuff like this.
    If you ask me, it helps express certain things better.

    I can give you nothing but compliments.


    Very nicely done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      It is me...who knew we could be the same in some aspect. And hey, I'm an [censored] too.
    -Tina A.K.A Gothic Misery
    PS. Keep writing......
    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by Gothic Misery | [ Reply to This ]
      oookayyy, this is........brutal. don't get me wrong, i love it. pure raw emotion. anger flying everywhere.....quick, duck!!
    nice work. are you really an a s s h o l e ?? is it purposefully or accidental?? just kidding.
    good write,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      ya I get it now (hope it lets me do a second post on this) but I now get it knowing what the meaning is and I like it, but hte last line catches me as odd. but over all now that I get it i like this poem. tis got a nice flow and a good message/ talking to self kinda flow.
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]
      cool...i dont know it just...it hits me as lyrics but i like it im adding it to my favorites, you can feel the anger and i love it when people arent afraid to use a good F U CK in their S H I T
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice flow, but its a little weird at the end. I think its a break up poem but I'm not gonna say anything in case I'm wrong
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]


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