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    dots Submission Name: keeps on r a i n i n g...dots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 527
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 160
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2385



    Description:
       this turned out to be a song about a friend.
    she was reaally preppy and its kinda a long story..but i love how the song turned out.

    in one part u'll notice real gramatical errors but it relates to her so dont mind it all that much. lol

    i really wanted people to get the right idea of how its suppost to sound..i guess if anyone knows kingdom hearts 2::the world that never was::thats the theme ..

    so i'll shut up now & let u read..^__^


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    dotskeeps on r a i n i n g...dots
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    Do you know
    how it feels,
    to be fighting for nothing?
    Do you tell
    all the feelings that you keep?
    How would you
    sell your thoughts
    to the strangers that you see?
    How could you,
    love yourself
    rather than the girl you used to be?

    where should i,
    choose to be in order
    to feel.. happy?
    where could i,
    fall within, without
    the dream im dreaming
    Coz to me
    that would be
    a tragety worth reading
    but you'll see,
    what i mean
    if my world falls so deep.
    ~
    Chorus:
    ~
    Just so we're clear
    i'd hate to be here
    where im s t a n d i n g.
    In the air
    e-v-e-r-y-where
    the couds
    they keep on r a i n i n g.
    Just so we're clear
    i H a t e it here
    where, im running from
    In the air
    e-v-e-r-y-where
    these thoughts..
    they keep on r a i n i n g.


    How are we?
    can you see,
    the lights of
    the city?
    Are you just,
    my good friend--
    but then
    leave me empty?
    Coz this world in the sky
    - so high-
    i feel im ~f a l l i n g~
    Do you hear, your phone line?
    it's me, coz i keep c a l l i n g

    Call me crazy,
    but i see these lights,
    of this city {& oh thay haunt meh}
    they are b l a c k .
    coz its d a r k .
    & so cold in sunlight.
    In this sky - oh i f l y -
    but i'll say, i feel like leaving.
    But to you,
    it's alright,
    Coz I stopped calling last night ..

    ~
    Chorus
    ~

    Bridge:

    Just because,
    im still here no,
    it doesn't mean im staying.
    In this air, i'll breath how i want to...
    & one day
    I'LL
    L o o k back
    S m i l e back
    S c r e a m back


    cry back to you. ..
    then fly away from you.

    then you'll see
    how l i f e can be.
    when it keeps on r a i n i n g ..




    Submitted on 2006-09-20 16:34:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it. i like your stuff. i didnt know i was able to comment you or i would be..there was a LONG while that i couldnt comment. which was a bummer... you have a interesting way of writing stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww, I want to hear the tune to the song so badly. I have know idea what Kingdom hearts is at all. But the lyrics are very well written. Songs have always been really hard for me, because I can never come up with a good chorus. I liked yours a lot.
    The line I love and could relate to the most was in the first part of the song, where you said "How coudl you love yourself rather then the person you used to be" I've had a lot of friends who used to be so nice and now there all mean and snotty. Every part of this reminds me of them.

    Great song.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an exceptionally written song
    I dont know if you know who Edie Brickell is (might be spelled wrong) or Tracy Chapman but I can easily see either one of them singing this song in a slow and then almost dancy folk like way and the ending
    MY GOD that is perfect
    My mind immeadiately want to like a soft whisper saying the last 3 lines real slow
    You definately have talent
    I cant wait to read your next write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the others here...

    I read a lot of song lyrics posted on this site and very few of them inspire me to want to hear the music and the voice behind the words.

    This one does.

    | Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]



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