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The Knife

Author: DrunkOnShadows
ASL Info:    16/F/Ont
Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 66 /84 /49
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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The Knife

Do you ever fucking wonder why I cut my fucking skin?
It's because you do those things to put me in this state I'm in
And I know you never mean to do those stupid things you do
But I can't get them out of my mind, and I can't stop hating you

It baffles me how ignorant you can be as to why
You'll sit there and wonder, and ask me why I cry
I'll say that I'm ok, and you'll smile and answer "fine."
You stupid bitch, what the fuck, can't you see I'm lying?

Because of you, I have absolutely no respect for life
And I'm so fucked up, that I'm turning to the knife
It's getting so bad now, I just wish that I could die
So to all the ones I love, I just want to say good-bye

Submitted on 2006-09-20 17:55:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I found this in an angry mood myself, and wow, it is well worth the read. There is an underlying disgust in the opening that I can identify with and it pulled me right in. I know how it can be, to have someone yank strings to the point that you just want to stick a razor through your wrist, or a gun in your mouth... but be constructive here. Instead of focusing on you, try kiling him instead. LOL (kinda... but not really.)
| Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]
  This was short, sweet (in a not actually sweet), and to the point. I love how you just came out from the first line to speak your mind. You got all the emotion out in such few lines. That is amazingly awesome. I would love to see a sequel to this...something along the lines of I'm turning the knife on you kind of thing. But that's just me. Keep up the writing...

| Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by shmuzzelle | [ Reply to This ]
  Omg.. this was one of the like.. best peices I've read today. Even though it was pretty short, you described how it feels, and I could understand what this peice was all about.

Yea.. when the person that made you cry, didn't even know it was them, you think they don't care. They drive you to the end.. where you don't know either to live or die anymore. But what I think is that even though you want to die.. you were supposed to live for a reason. Whatever reason that is, I don't think people should throw their lives away.

The way you wrote this.. I could tell how angry you or the person you're writing about felt. It describes so much and the pain, hurt, anger, you could feel it all just by reading this.

Keep on writing..
~*~ Lisa ~*~
| Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]

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