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    dots Submission Name: Friends to lovers.dots
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    Author: Ryou_Bakura
    ASL Info:    16/f/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 35/43/13
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 144
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 567



    Description:
       Its a part of a poem chain about my first love. that I still love and loves me. looks for each post as it comes out and read the story of my first love.


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    dotsFriends to lovers.dots
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    First we were friends, happy and playing,
    Then slowly thing happened and then we were dating,
    I was so confused, I didn’t know what was happening,
    I think you were lost to,
    that’s why I kept apologizing.
    Things kept happening,
    Trying to stop us,
    But we fought hart to keep them from beating us,
    Things got hard and out of hand
    There was nothing we could do
    But let go of hands,
    We said our good byes
    And one again became friends.
    But things were never the same again.




    Submitted on 2006-09-20 20:13:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I know what you're talking about. I'm going through the same thing right now. There are some spelling mistakes but other than that its going on my favorites.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! Told you I would comment! I win. :P Anyways, very good write. Congrats. It had a nice little beat to it. I just thing you used the same words a little too much like 'happen'. You might want to think of synonyms, but then again that might mess up the rhythm, so scratch that. All-in-all, GOOD JOB!!

    Peace V

    Ren
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, again a very good write, i think you mean (once) not (one). poe
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i knew you were a good writer so just post anything you write....
    I love your writting

    love ya amanda
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem, friends to lovers and back to friends never seems to work out, good write though, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]



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