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Death by Dog

Author: Beez
ASL Info:    38
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Words: 138
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Death by Dog

My big stomach really hurts.
In a few minutes, I'll have the squirts!
Why, O why did I get the extra cheese on that hot dog?
Soon, will come a great fog,
some will think it to be smog.
Others will run in fear
Shedding many a tear

This stinky cloud is green, which incidentally reminds me of the hot dog relish

My bathroom has become a war zone, a no mans land,
Circling the bowl are the remnants of that chili can!
Why is fortune so unkind, how did it come to this?
Death by hotdog, life I will miss

Now, alas I must part,
for something fearful is stirring inside me

and its definitely not a fart!!!!

Submitted on 2006-09-20 21:50:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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