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    dots Submission Name: Tales of Reesedots
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    Author: MowsysWrath
    ASL Info:    15 Beastiality Bunghole
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 75/85/45
    Words: 493
    Class/Type: Story/Dark
    Total Views: 239
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2841



    Description:
       This was written quickly, in the span of 30 minuets. Not alot for 30 minuets, eh?

    Zombie warning.


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    dotsTales of Reesedots
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    He knew it would be the worst day of his life the moment he looked out the window. Reese Merithal was a tall, slender, and kind-hearted man at the age of 23, but you wouldn't be able to tell. Hell, You'd be more concerned about yourself at this point in time. But I'm straying from the story.

    It all started yesterday morning, he wasn't sure what time, but he remembered laying on his couch in his small, 3-room house, staring blankly at the Television screen as a news broadcast came on air for about twenty seconds before ending in screaming and darkness after the camera had been knocked over (or thats what Reese thought that happened.) Reese also thought it might have been a joke of some sort, until he looked out his window.

    Aside from small blood smears of two hands, a woman was screaming at him to help her. A large chunk of her cheek was missing, a bit of blood seemed to squirt out while she paniced. She looked about the age of 19. Reese couldn't see any more of her but her head. Her hair was hanging loose, but far from straightened.

    "Help me!" She exclaimed, one hand moving to her missing cheek to desperately attempt to stop the blood. "Help me please! Help me, they're going to kill me!" Tears were already rolling down the young woman's face, her remaining cheek shined in the morning light.

    Reese's eyes shot open completely and his jaw dropped. Reese stood and ran to the window, as he approached to try and ask what was going on, something slammed into the woman's side, taking her to the ground. The woman's screams rose and fell with her death. When Reese looked to see what happened, he nearly vomited.

    *BLAAAGHHS*

    Scratch that. He did vomit. What he saw was an old man, sinking his teeth into the woman's shoulder and neck. The old man was ravenously tearing pieces of meat from the woman's corpse, and when the man took notice she was dead, he glanced up through the window. Right at Reese.

    Reese stumbled backward, the old man's chin dripped with the thick fluid needed to keep him, and the now dead woman, alive. What had horrified Reese the most though, a large amount of the old man's skull was showing. Bites and blunt strikes had torn away at the scalp and all that remained in most places was the red and white skull.

    The old man didn't stop for a second, he immediently began pounding on the window. Now, Reese was not a violent person, but instinct told him when he was in danger and now, instinct was screaming at him. Reese turned to run, to get something blunt, but slipped on his own puddle of puke, and smashed his head on the floor. His vision blurred and all went dark...




    Submitted on 2006-09-20 21:51:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm..I ythought it was okay, but not the kind of thing I enjoy reading. I think you describd it really well, which is why I don't like it. But description is a good thing. THe only reason I don't like it is because of th notnet. I' sure you could put your excellent writing to bettr use then writing stuff like this. Then again, I'm not that good of a judge seeing as I've written two stories and both were..well I dont really know cause I've gotten few comments. Anyways, Maybe I'll read some o your other stuff. Good job.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      yooooo awsome. i love ur zombie stories. sorry it took so long to read my comp had a virus.

    back to the story. i liked the end where he slips on his own puke. yeah that was funny. his a gonna be ZOMBIFIED> YEAHHH

    yo peace
    Da Grim Reaperessssss
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow rat this was actually interesting.

    See im in school first hour web design -.- fun le me tell ya. anywho i was looking through the post and your name caught my eye (only cause i missded u so much!) anyway i digress sorryes.

    Let me say your an amazing story teller and take that and run with it hun bc i never read online storys but i made an exception with you cause i like ya so much damn stupid ADD back to your story.

    I love the elements you used in this. instead of making it all a horror scene (did a good job on that btw) you used some humor also which is much appreciated (only i laughed out loud and now im getting weird ass looks...thanks-.-)

    STUPID ADD!!!

    now again to your story. i really actually love this work hell im ganna read more of your stuff when i get home okies got any recomendations? well anyway if you did not figure out who this was by now (shame on you rat!) its me tash lol love ya my big ol rat majig

    all the love
    nikki
    ~tashea~

    *kisses*
    | Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      That last part was quite funny! I like how you used the vomit for something later. It gives a bit of foreshadowing for what's going to happen next. See I like short stories than long poems. Poems, you have to deciefer them and get the true meaning while the story, it might have a hidden meaning. This story was straight to the point, linear.

    There was a few points where you did use that narration where they kinda leave you off track. You used very little of it. It was kinda iffy on my terms.

    You also hinted that Reese was a kind man and that he wouldn't fight for his life, he'd rather run for it. In most cases I'm tired of the calm little child-at-heart character, but this is a different case. It's also good that you didn't use the character that was a tough-ass. People make things to actiony with the guy who has a freaking shot gun shooting 50 zombies per minute.

    I like how the scary part of the story is mild yet discriptive in it's own way. At least you're not going to the point where the zombie rips out her intestines and jump ropes with it. *Laughs a little.*

    Overall review: I thought this was an okay piece, it didn't shine like a star nor it was dull like...your face. I couldn't find anything that would help people live their lives better. This is just another scary story waiting to be told on Halloween. Keep on the stories and never give up, etc.
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Finnigan | [ Reply to This ]



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