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Ever Elusive Creature


Author: Beez
ASL Info:    38
Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 6 /6 /13
Words: 127
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I was really trying to write a real poem here, feel free to let me know how to improve.


Ever Elusive Creature



a kiss on the cheek
the extreme nearness of another human being
certain smells
warmth on a cold night
a cold washrag on your face when you are sick
the knowledge of someone who truly cares
laughs at your dumb jokes
loyal
compromising, forgiving, loving
shoulders massaged
tired feet rubbed
making sure your clothes match
able to talk for hours about nothing
cries when you cry
laughs with you
shares hopes, dreams, goals
makes life a pleasure to live
great beauty not always visible to the eye
where are you
the best of creation
ever elusive creature
I am here

waiting .......




Submitted on 2006-09-20 21:56:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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