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    dots Submission Name: Happy birthdaydots
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    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 694
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 200



    Description:
       Small but kind words to my love when her birthday comes about.


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    dotsHappy birthdaydots
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    Burn thy desire to fill my heart,
    love eternal till the wind to sway.
    born for me a life in itself,
    my love wish you a happy birthday.

    --keestu




    Submitted on 2006-09-20 23:03:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow,this is great.short but sweet.i love it,hey do you care if i read it to my boyfriend on his birthday in a few days?it really discribes how i feel and i have been trying to write something as a birthday present but this,pardon the pun,takes the cake!hahaha,anyway i will talk to you later,

    Keep it real,
    Faith
    | Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      very well worded and beautiful! but i think this is something you send to your sweetheart, not post to be rated though!
    | Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by blonde_honey418 | [ Reply to This ]


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