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Sold Out org. *read first

Author: Beez
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My good friend waxingpoetic wrote this,
I found it a great read. Identified with the male character in her poem, so I wrote a tribute to her poem with her permission.

Sold Out org. *read first

Sold Out by Jeni/waxingpoetic

I see you standing there in line,
Leaning against the barricade like you own the place.
Your dyed black hair falling into your bright blue eyes.
Eyebrow piercing glinting,
Faded Misfits shirt hanging down
Over your punked-out cut offs;
Untied Vans with lyrics written on the sides.
The chain of your wallet clanking against metal.
You are everything that I used to want.
So now I need to tell you that you can go home;
The tickets to my heart are all sold out,
And don't try to sneak in.
They were all bought up
By the boy with plain brown eyes.
The one that wears a quiet expression,
And doesn't wear his heart on his sleeve.
Listens to calmer music,
Doesn't scream into microphones,
Or thrash on a guitar.
But he is the one for me.
Opposites attract and it's true.
Here I am with my Flamin' Chucks,
Enough bracelets to cover seven arms,
Blacked-out like a depressed teenager.
And he stands next to me:
Tall and proud and clean cut.
Nothing like what I ever expected
But more than I could ever want.
Holding the ticket to my sold out heart.

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