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poem for a lovely lady


Author: Beez
ASL Info:    38
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Words: 167
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This was written for an old girlfriend, while I was driving the three hours to see her.
I have kept it all these years because I thought it wasn't too bad being written at seventy five miles an hour.


poem for a lovely lady



I once dreamed of an amazing girl.
One like no other, a genuine pearl.

It was like a dream, we finally got to meet
She was perfectly imperfect, always shaking her feet.

She likes me, I think
because she calls me "Bare"
and only me will she let touch her hair.

Thinking of her could never bring me down.
Around her I act funny, like a dorky clown.

Like a warm, fuzzy blanket on a cold winter night,
whenever I'm with her
it just feels right.

If she were to fall, will I be there to catch her?
"Don't worry," says she, "No pressure, No pressure"

Phone calls with her grow ever longer,
while feelings for her grow ever stronger

Where can you find this wonder of which I speak?
In the deepest valley?
At the highest peak?

Search ever constantly,
all throughout the land,

You will never find another,

like my

Marci Ann




Submitted on 2006-09-20 23:40:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a sweet love poem. I am impressed by the description in that you wrote this while driving, that could be hazardous to your health haha . Anyway, this made me smile. It is so genuine and I love the personal touch you add to this by including her name at the end. Many love poems are very generalized and even though most are written with a specific person in mind, they fail to mention it. This one ends with her name and I wonder if you ever gave this to her? It is very sweet. Nice work.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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