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This is a test...


Author: rememberplaydoh
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This is a test...



This is a test...
this is only a test.
I want to know
...do you care?
Will you try to call
if I am mute?
...do I mean enough?
...do you want to talk?

This is a test...
this is only a test.
Don't draw conclusions
about my mind.
Don't think I'm silent
because I want to be.
I'd love to call
but I'm restraining myself.

This is a test...
this is only a test.
But maybe...
...are you testing me?
Are you trying to discover
if I care about you
by not calling...
...to see if I'll seek you?

This is a test...
this is only a test.
Maybe I should
put an end to it now.
The results might be muddled
and confuse us both.
It's time to change
the method of study.




Submitted on 2006-09-21 12:30:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a test...
This is only a test.

Wouldn't it be great if it were only that easy? I am picturing this round governmental warning signal with the little radar hand sweeping around, then giant Sesame Street printed out questions scrolling across the bottom of the screen... hiding the heart behind technology, buffer-zone safe from rejection, while you reach out... You captured the hesitation and nervousness perfectly in this write.
| Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]
  lol that last line tickled my funny bone...dunno if you meant for that to happen, but...the whole thing read of young love to me...
holding back because you want to be the one that's sought...either because you've sought for too long or because you aren't sure of feelings...really never gets you anywhere...everything you're thinking is what the other person is thinking, so someone has to pick up the phone and make the first attempt....
that said, as for the write itself...not too bad...very straightforward, but it sounds real...genuine confusion.
for what the comment lacks, i'll leave this...it was a good write...very simple, but very real...
| Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]


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