A Mental Masterpiece -------------------------------------------
Warm dew drops on skin
Bleach white beds
Picasso's not dead
He lies here
In the smears
With paint brush percision
Oil based viens
Paints a masterpiece
For a mental patients
Multiply like sins
At the sight
Of your Genius
Criticisms: multiple mispellings. consider to your capitalization. the first word of every line is capitalized and that is not correct grammar. consider as well punctuation, such as commas. seems trite i know, but it can be a very necessary part of building tension (which is a good thing) in your poetry.
Also,I don't get the meaning of the poem. But that's okay. I may be simply stupid - there is evidence both for and against the hypothesis.
The title: bold. too bold for this point in the development of the poem, with such flaws present.
Praise: good language - steel salvation was my favorite part. like also the reference to mental patients. the structure is strong as well. you build tension with the short lines and i can clearly see the transition in your work from one point to the next - even if i don't get the point. you were consistent throughout in terms of the structure and of the tone. it was serious from beginning to end.
Overall: this could be a 'mental masterpiece,' as you say. but it would suggest i have a mediocre mind - which a pretty good assumption as well. my advice: clarify. blood on my arm-beach-picasso buried-mental patients-genius. im not there yet.