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    dots Submission Name: Julydots
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    Author: Scribner
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 131/134/18
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsJulydots
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    I wish I could fold up July
    and tuck it safe away,
    when the blustering winds of December
    have come again to stay.
    I would perserve the fireflies
    and the warm lilac breeze;
    the chorus of crickets
    and the gently swaying trees.
    I would lay summer's promise
    gently unfolded in your hands,
    to blow the ice and cold
    to some far and distant land.




    Submitted on 2004-01-27 16:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a precious poem...

    keep some summer tucked away to pull out in cold December...

    i picture a firefly in the snow..and wonder how disoriented it would be...

    and crickets chirping outside while icicles hang from the roof...

    interesting mix of sights...

    like this...compact and sure.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it very nice i like the context of winter turning into summer in the mind
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      I love winter ..but the line " I would preserve fireflies" reminds me of the good things of summer i was doing as a kid...the text reminds me that in fact I love every season !!! Thankx god I don't live in a country that has the same temperature all year long. I like it when I have some warm feeling when I read a text . This one did the job !!
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by Aceofthedice | [ Reply to This ]
      I am seriously missing summer now. I like the way you express. Favorite line: "I would lay summer's promise gently unfolded in your hand". Evokes a great image.
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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