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    dots Submission Name: Walking Awaydots
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    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       my best friend is leaving tomorrow and i really dont want her to go...but she is'nt happy here so i guess i have to let her leave.


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    dotsWalking Awaydots
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    Sitting here,
    as you walk away,
    theres nothing I can do,
    and nothing I can say.

    I can't keep you here,
    if it's not where you want to be,
    nothing can stop you,
    not even me.

    I don't want you to go,
    I'm down on my knees,
    with tears in my eyes,
    I'm begging you please.

    They say if you love something,
    you should let it go,
    and as I say goodbye,
    I try not to let the hurt show.

    I put on a smile,
    although I'm crying inside,
    but it's your decision,
    it's your life.

    But I hope you come back,
    and stay longer next time,
    cause I'm tired of people leaving me,
    I'm tired of the story of my life.

    With every gust of wind,
    and every cloud in the sky,
    I'll think of you,
    and try to put on a smile.

    I can't say I'm happy,
    that you're walking away,
    but I'll try to be happy for you,
    if thats the decision you make.




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      awww why must you write so emotionally?? (I mean that in a VERY good way, lol emo===awesome.) I really wish I could write like this, as if my writes aren't bad enough the rest of the time, I have a hard time putting emotions into words when I'm writing for/about another person. This was so sad, she's very lucky though to have such a good friend. and I totally relate sometimes we have to end up hurting ourselves in order to avoid hurting someone else more....so you just watch them leave when inside a part of walks away with them and than end up wishing you could have told them but at the same time you don't want them to feel guilty or like you're being selfish so you just leave it be; that's life sometimes, but I'm sorry about your friend.
    peace,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem ur such an amazing writter lol <3
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem and the rhyming that was in it, but I am guessing you ran out of ideas towards to the end, cuz it didn't rhyme in the last two stanzas. But nonetheless...I still liked it.

    Keep Writing.
    ~Strator
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by Strator | [ Reply to This ]


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