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    dots Submission Name: Some Kind of Mojodots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1080
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 397



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       This is a typical Amy write, but I haven't submitted anything lately.


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    dotsSome Kind of Mojodots
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    She sneezed and words went everywhere:
    a piece of prose hung from her nose;
    a metaphor was atop her big toe.
    Somehow they'd freed themselves
    from that prison of a page.
    They amused her
    by changing color,
    by rearranging themselves.
    She gleefully exclaimed, "this is some kind of mojo,
    but aren't all words magic?"




    Submitted on 2006-09-22 01:52:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is magic with words, Achoo!

    can somebody lend me a handkerchief...if i sneeze again i want to capture all these words in one place.


    cool piece--only complaint is i wanted a reference back to the sneeze..the first three lines introduced that clever idea...then it disappeared.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      these are the pieces & the moments in poetry I love!!!

    when one captures the "moment"; the "NOW" - and I love the mojo you got goin on here...

    We have, locally, a superb blues guitarist, lyricist...."Johnny Mojo".

    No matter what - you got my "mojo" workin!!!

    Great!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles 2 share

    tif
    | Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Kind of a child like play with words and there meanings. I liked it alot Amy!
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really cute Amy... I adore the thought of sneezing words onto a page, pieces of prose hanging off her nose lol.

    And yea, word are definitely magic... I wish more realized that...

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very neat. I loved how you ended it. Perfect! It was short, but it was not a simple or weak poem due to it's lenght. Ths was funny and very creative in style and wording. good imagery and a pure hearted message all writer's can relate to. Great work Amy!

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Delightful poem. It has a free and innocent feel to it - just the right amount of humor and enough information to complete the picture in your mind.

    I'm one of these people that get affected by the moon and mostly my 'word mojo' seems to go awry and I say the weirdest things or just give up on a thought and finish the sentence trailing off lamely...

    I'll never be able to sneeze now without wondering about the prose :-)

    Great write.
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh Amy,

    This is really cute and has your signature cleverness in every line.
    I don't think I would change a thing. I didn't know your mojo could let go but with sneeze I suppose anything is possible.

    It sure clears my head out. Now, maybe the writes will flow for you.

    Love,

    Nan

    P.S. that is a gorgeous photo, is it new?
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWW
    This is so adorable! You are right this is a typical Amy write. :) I love this nonetheless! I think I've told you this before but I think you should illustrate your poems. Sort of like that one guy does...I forgot his name..haha I don't feel like looking it up right now either.
    I love this though! Prose hanging from her nose and metaphors atop her toe...that's amazing imagery. :)
    Great job! I wish I had something productive to say but I really really really enjoyed this. It's a favorite!
    Hugs and love sis! :)
    Bethany
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Amy,

    Been wondering around. Thought i'd say hi and see what's new.

    Some kind of mojo. what an interesting title to pick. And you've also made an interesting point. It's so hard to argue with that especially if everything is placed the way it is suppose to be placed.

    I think this is the part where poetry is known to be fun. You just brought fun into this poem and that also is very hard to argue with.

    So once more, this piece has all the fun it needs to say that it was very enjoyable to read.

    Hope to talk to you soon.
    Take care....

    ~Irina
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL. Whimsical, funny, cute, and truly a 'typical Amy' write. I especially loved "a piece of prose hung from her nose" - the imagery's hilarious. :)
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so funny and quirky, Amy!
    i love "a piece of prose hung from her nose.."
    and the metaphor on her big toe..
    wonderful use of visuals and language.
    and magic! you've proven your point,
    words are magic, and "some kind of mojo."
    i see her dancing and giggling..

    delightful.

    mucho amore,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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