Catalyst.

Author: icaughtfire591 ASL Info:    16/f/MI Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75 /74 /39 Words: 121

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Catalyst.

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You think I don’t know, And I think you do. I just can’t tell from The outside, but can you? Inside there is this… I think I feel alive, Though I don’t know if What you felt has died. But I don’t hate her, That I will promise. You are the lover That I will not miss. Can’t you not see the Blindness in my eyes? I can tell you right now I’ve never told you lies. I bet that you’re proud of How hollow I’ve become. I wish I could see out To look at just how numb. I brace myself within, Because there is still this… Love, I smile for and against You; my dearest catalyst.

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I like the stanza at the end of the poem the best. (that is my vote) This is very sad because it comes at a point in a relationship where you are trying to understand what went wrong and why. How could their feeling change when I feel that mine have not? Why would they change, what did I do?????? You did a very good job at capturing this feeling and this point in the realationship. Monica

| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]

If I am reading this correctly, the writer has been jilted by another woman. The writer is addressing her now ex-lover in a sort of tongue-in-cheek farewell, realizing a great deal of energy was expended on this particular lover, and all for naught. It has a very interesting style and seems to turn upon itself more than once.

| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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