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    dots Submission Name: Catalyst.dots
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    Author: icaughtfire591
    ASL Info:    16/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75/74/39
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 827
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 747



    Description:
       i struggled for a while trying to figure out how i should word the last paragraph. should it be as it is, or

    Because there is still thisÖ
    I brace myself within,
    Love, I smile for and against
    You; my dearest catalyst.

    i really liked how this one turned out and i hope you'll enjoy it too. please comment.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsCatalyst.dots
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    You think I donít know,
    And I think you do.
    I just canít tell from
    The outside, but can you?
    Inside there is thisÖ
    I think I feel alive,
    Though I donít know if
    What you felt has died.
    But I donít hate her,
    That I will promise.
    You are the lover
    That I will not miss.
    Canít you not see the
    Blindness in my eyes?
    I can tell you right now
    Iíve never told you lies.
    I bet that youíre proud of
    How hollow Iíve become.
    I wish I could see out
    To look at just how numb.

    I brace myself within,
    Because there is still thisÖ
    Love, I smile for and against
    You; my dearest catalyst.




    Submitted on 2006-09-22 06:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the stanza at the end of the poem the best. (that is my vote)

    This is very sad because it comes at a point in a relationship where you are trying to understand what went wrong and why. How could their feeling change when I feel that mine have not? Why would they change, what did I do??????

    You did a very good job at capturing this feeling and this point in the realationship.

    Monica
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]
      If I am reading this correctly, the writer has been jilted by another woman. The writer is addressing her now ex-lover in a sort of tongue-in-cheek farewell, realizing a great deal of energy was expended on this particular lover, and all for naught.

    It has a very interesting style and seems to turn upon itself more than once.
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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