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Author: icaughtfire591
ASL Info:    16/f/MI
Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 75 /74 /39
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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i struggled for a while trying to figure out how i should word the last paragraph. should it be as it is, or

Because there is still this…
I brace myself within,
Love, I smile for and against
You; my dearest catalyst.

i really liked how this one turned out and i hope you'll enjoy it too. please comment.


You think I don’t know,
And I think you do.
I just can’t tell from
The outside, but can you?
Inside there is this…
I think I feel alive,
Though I don’t know if
What you felt has died.
But I don’t hate her,
That I will promise.
You are the lover
That I will not miss.
Can’t you not see the
Blindness in my eyes?
I can tell you right now
I’ve never told you lies.
I bet that you’re proud of
How hollow I’ve become.
I wish I could see out
To look at just how numb.

I brace myself within,
Because there is still this…
Love, I smile for and against
You; my dearest catalyst.

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  I like the stanza at the end of the poem the best. (that is my vote)

This is very sad because it comes at a point in a relationship where you are trying to understand what went wrong and why. How could their feeling change when I feel that mine have not? Why would they change, what did I do??????

You did a very good job at capturing this feeling and this point in the realationship.

| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]
  If I am reading this correctly, the writer has been jilted by another woman. The writer is addressing her now ex-lover in a sort of tongue-in-cheek farewell, realizing a great deal of energy was expended on this particular lover, and all for naught.

It has a very interesting style and seems to turn upon itself more than once.
| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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