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Author: GothamFreak Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110 /48 /19 Words: 96

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you're there for me when I need a shoulder to cry on you make me feel wanted when I feel as though I am being shunned you always listen when the rest of the world acts as though they cannot hear you give me advice when nobody else seems to care you talk to me when I am invisible to the rest of society you make me feel welcome when everybody else suts me out you were always there.... you are always there....

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thats awsome that u have somebody there for u always. it make s the poem nice yo peace

| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]

A touching, simple, yet sincere write. Through the most of the poem it seems as though the person is still here to look out for you, but then the ending lines suggest other wise and I found this very saddening. On the last line of the sixth stanza I think you meant "shuts." Thanks for sharing this heartfelt and personal piece.

| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ]

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