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Author: GothamFreak
Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110 /48 /19
Words: 96
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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She is always there for me.....


you're there for me
when I need a shoulder
to cry on

you make me feel wanted
when I feel
as though
I am being shunned

you always listen
when the rest of the world
acts as though
they cannot hear

you give me advice
when nobody else
seems to care

you talk to me
when I am invisible
to the rest of society

you make me feel welcome
when everybody else
suts me out

you were always there....
you are always there....

Submitted on 2006-09-22 11:24:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  thats awsome that u have somebody there for u always. it make s the poem nice

yo peace
| Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
  A touching, simple, yet sincere write. Through the most of the poem it seems as though the person is still here to look out for you, but then the ending lines suggest other wise and I found this very saddening.
On the last line of the sixth stanza I think you meant "shuts."
Thanks for sharing this heartfelt and personal piece.
| Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ]

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