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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    Description:
       She is always there for me.....


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    you're there for me
    when I need a shoulder
    to cry on

    you make me feel wanted
    when I feel
    as though
    I am being shunned

    you always listen
    when the rest of the world
    acts as though
    they cannot hear

    you give me advice
    when nobody else
    seems to care

    you talk to me
    when I am invisible
    to the rest of society

    you make me feel welcome
    when everybody else
    suts me out

    you were always there....
    you are always there....




    Submitted on 2006-09-22 11:24:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thats awsome that u have somebody there for u always. it make s the poem nice


    yo peace
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      A touching, simple, yet sincere write. Through the most of the poem it seems as though the person is still here to look out for you, but then the ending lines suggest other wise and I found this very saddening.
    On the last line of the sixth stanza I think you meant "shuts."
    Thanks for sharing this heartfelt and personal piece.
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by SilverScent | [ Reply to This ]


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