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    dots Submission Name: **uNtItLeDdots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 606
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 146



    Description:
       Just a little something I found jotted in my english book.


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    dots**uNtItLeDdots
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    May you live your life well
    Without me you'll be fine
    You have better things to do
    Then spend your time with me.




    Submitted on 2006-09-22 17:27:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I find this an excellent start to what truly could be a perfect piece if you only added a few more lines packed with the same emotion you started with
    In this write I feel the energy of someone giving up on love because they feel their love is not being returned
    Excellent work
    I stress only add to this if you choose to
    I would never tell someone how to write
    Poetry is an expression of ones own emotions
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, untitled poems are annoying but who am I to speak, many of my poems are without a title.

    Okay, so my thoughts on this:


    - Since it is so short, it definately needs some punctuation.
    - Although this gave a sad affect, it all seemed a little incomplete.



    That's all i guess. Overall, although this was short, it wasn't poorly written. Enjoyed the simple message,




    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      you shouldn't leave this untitled... although I'm not sure what to title it either...
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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