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    dots Submission Name: Sunset... i love youdots
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    Author: Black-Death
    Elite Ratio:    1.2 - 18/86/138
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSunset... i love youdots
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    As we sat under the sun... as we held eachother in are arms... as we looked at the sunset from the docks on this wunderfull beach.... as the water hit my feet... as you rested your head on my sholder i rested my head on yours... i can smell the perfume you have on you... on your butifull skin... on your long silky black hair that comes down to your sholders... as i put my hand on your bareleg...
    i look at you... your butifull... in a black skirt... black t-shirt... as i place my hand under your chin.. you know instantly what im going to do... i look into your eyes... thay reflect the sunset off of them... i relize there i loved you more then life its self.. i moved my lips closer to yours you moved your head towards my... are lips hit.. sparks flew... fireworks whent off...
    we both pulled awway slowly... your blushing... im loving... you place your head on my sholder again and wisper into my ear... i love you...




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      Cute but it has spelling errors and could use some commas. Besides that I think you did a good job on it.

    sarahE.P.

    P.S. this might be my favorite but I'll just have to see after I read the rest.
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by SarahE.P. | [ Reply to This ]


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