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    dots Submission Name: Orchestras In Heavendots
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    Author: Liv2LoveThePain
    ASL Info:    19 - F - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 1527/1515/256
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 1120
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsOrchestras In Heavendots
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    Are there microphones in Heaven?
    I can't hear you today.
    Amplify the promises;
    send them on their way
    to where you left your heart.
    It rains down here all day.
    Without you singing back to me,
    the sunlight turns to gray.

    Are there radios in Heaven;
    speakers in the stars?
    Maybe if I scream again,
    this space won't seem as far.
    But how can voices stretch
    years to where you are?
    Even if I practice more,
    you won't hear this guitar.

    Are there orchestras in Heaven?
    'Cause I can't hear them play.
    "Open up your heart and then
    you'll feel them there
    ," they say.
    Well, maybe mine is closed,
    sewn, stapled to portray
    the promises of Heaven that
    seem too far away.




    Submitted on 2006-09-22 21:51:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Perfection personified.
    | Posted on 2007-02-06 00:00:00 | by Endless River | [ Reply to This ]
      This is probably one of the best poems I've ever read. It's flawless and it flows so well. I like the thought process of it all, and the images you put into it...I really have no criticism for this.

    I hope there are orchestras in heaven.

    -kristen
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
      This one almost made me cry - lol - as odd as that sounds, because in many ways it wasn't as dark and sad as some of your other stuff, but still... it was very touching, and held just enough longing to really make you feel it, and to play with the reader's emotions. Often times I know I feel that Heaven's Promises are way, way too far away, but then sometimes you look around and realise that perhaps, they are not as far away as we first think.

    I really enjoyed this, a lot. I may have to share this one with a few friends - I think they'd appreciate this one :)

    Cheers,

    ~Mandi Gayle~
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by Mandi Gayle | [ Reply to This ]
      You can't see it, but I'm holding a lit lighter to screen. Yeah, just yeah. It's like afi meets Led Zepplin. This was so immensly beautiful And not so much in that dark, sinister, what the [censored] is wrong with me(the reader) for liking this kinda way either. No this is. Whoa, you ARE my fav. poet period of all time! I'm not even playing. Poe would look up to you with admiration, and if he didn't I'd knock his ass to his knees so he'd have to! I don't know what else to say, you're like an earthbound angel with a tatoo of [censored] heaven on her arm! Ah, it seems so beautiful!
    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely, lovely. I love it! haha, Really... I enjoyed the entire thing. And wow, you have a lot of posts I will definitely have to check out. I found the comparing music and heaven great. I mean, I guess it's not completely original, the idea of music being heavenly, but you made it so it was original; I've definitely not read anything quite like it. So great! It's a favorite.

    Peace, LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      This was amazing! I can't even begin to describe the emotion that I'm feeling from reading this piece. It's not too often that words completely escape me, but you have succeeded with this one, so I'll just fave it and get my point across that way! I loved it! It's been awhile since I've checked out your writing and I am very glad that I decided to today.

    Candi
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      "Are there radios in Heaven;
    speakers in the stars?
    Maybe if I scream again,
    this space won't seem as far.
    But how can voices stretch
    years to where you are?
    Even if I practice more,
    you won't hear this guitar"

    well you did it ... it goes for one of my favorites... i love it .. maybe because i lvoe musik with all my heart ... well yeah it is a good write becuase it has a lot of imagery and well it flows well i may say... well keep writing and have a nice day
    and if you have time please take a look to my writings.. and i would be glad you leave a comment on them.. take care
    peace and love
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      Guru, you... you... i...

    there are no words to explain how much i love this, so im goingto collect myself for a minute and then try to find some words...


    ok, you are super amazing. I love this... it's so beautiful. i love the whole musical heaven theme. You keep gettin more creative everyday.

    i'm not the best commentor today, so i'm just gonna favortize this and call it a day.

    your wordless homie,
    -Kate
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good! I like the way you think sister. Smile it only gets better. Your poetry sould be in every corner of this planet.
    Kelley Frost

    P.s. Hows it been going?
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Heaven has a lovely orchestra,
    with woodwinds, brass, and strings;
    and the songs are heard by those who pray,
    their words, each angel sings.

    Here on Earth the broken instruments,
    long to join this wondrous band,
    but they cannot play unless repaired
    and tuned by God's right hand.

    Each must follow the Conductor,
    Only One knows every score,
    He has written through eternity,
    Where He leads through Heaven's door.

    So, don't fear if you can't hear it, yet
    With your faith, you'll learn to play.
    God alone made you His instrument
    And He longs to hear you play.



    The Gadfly
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]


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