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Acid Tears


Author: IROT
ASL Info:    14/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    1.51 - 5 /2 /1
Words: 187
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Honestly I don't know what I was thinking about when writing this poem. I do know though that some scars never fade.


Acid Tears



Cover up and retrace your steps from the days before.

Look into the rain and watch as every drop makes your heart scream for more.

Dream. Look around and attempt to decipher every mystery that seems to linger.

It's not a life of choice. Not a life of truth. More so, a life of chance, to get it right or wave at the opportunity.

The footsteps through the halls, like the ghosts that will haunt you forever.

The ones that loved the most, are the ones who took it away.

My destiny-shattered into nothing and left to walk over forever.

My dust covered pictures with vague memories of what's now unknown.

How far will the unknown go to push you to the limit?

Heart Attack, oh how you should make me free and teach me to attack as you do.

Make me repair the rips and burns of my past.

Let me be as the wind blows for me one day.

Let my Acid Tears leave scars, all the way down my face....




Submitted on 2006-09-22 21:52:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It tragic, but what symbolism is it that your trying to convey? I do enjoy it alot, but I can't get past the fact that I cant find a central theme, not that that's bad or anything, much of my stuff can be the same. lol. But what is it you are trying to convey?

Acid
| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Acid | [ Reply to This ]
  Baby you know I loved this poe.. And actually reading it ymself helps me see the pain in it on a much higher scale. It's hard to discpher weather this poem is about and ex that will remain nameless. Or a Close relative that will remain nameless. This poem is so me metamorphical (sp) (and look it up if you don't know what it means). I honestly think this is better then any poem I've wrote. I've always wanted to write a poem like this where there's symbolism in the words but I always fail, and I'm not just saying this cuz you're my lady it's true this is a great poem you need to post more on here. Keep it up baby and I'll keep reading

=Logan Hurt=
| Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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