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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Sophiadots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 579
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsSweet Sophiadots
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    Silent I stand above you
    And watch your gental breath
    I promise to protect you
    From the cold hands of death
    I'll always be below
    to catch you when you fall
    pick you up and tell you
    it's alright and to stand tall
    to kiss your wounds when your hurt
    Dry your crying eyes
    Share your fondest moments
    To smell the summer skies
    I guess what I'm trying to tell you
    Is my baby please sleep tight
    I'll be here in the morning
    And for the rest of your life.






    Submitted on 2006-09-22 23:00:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great poem for a lover & a friend.
    I like the your form & diction in this piece.
    If I had someone in my life, I would give them this poem. So I hope Sophia is a real person.

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    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      very cute. i'm assuming 'sweet sophia' is your daughter?
    it has the perfect rhythm and length to be a lullaby. could be remembered easily.
    great job.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      this sounds like something my mother would say to me. i relly like it because it reminds me of wen i was younger and my mum used to tuck me into bed. def going to add this to my favs. <33ashley
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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