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    dots Submission Name: Spilt Worlddots

    Author: Shadow_Mirror
    ASL Info:    23/m/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 54/39/18
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Well, this one was for Whirl so her life wouldn't be so boring... maybe now she'll even appciate it more ^.^

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    dotsSpilt Worlddots

    "The sun warms the body,
    while the rain sooths the soul.
    The soul is split jaggedly upon itself,
    to forever be seperated and entertwined.
    The Waters reflecting the air,
    both living togather in harmony.
    We can't help but look around,
    at the wonders that surrounds us everyday.
    We love our world, for both good and bad,
    though we can't help it's own decline,
    for time is the only thing without a partner,
    and it's going to bring all of us with it.."

    Submitted on 2006-09-23 17:10:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good, very abstract. Had a tough time with it but hey, i have tough time with my own poems too. Your expressions are good and since it's free verse the flow is very liquid.
    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      No problem Whirl, your my friend and I love doing favors for my friends, thats how I was able to do that. I'm glad you'll be smiling, wish I could see it, haha. Just think of this whenever ya blue.
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by Shadow_Mirror | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel so honoured, truely. thats a great poem, how did you manage that in like, ten minutes??
    i appreciate this, it's gorgeous. and yes, i am trying to appreciate life, things are just kinda 'sucky' at the moment. i'll get over it, no worries.
    the first four lines are beautiful,
    thank you, thank you, thank you.
    i'll be smiling for a very long time now.
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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