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    dots Submission Name: i can't take it anymore.dots

    Author: BrokenxPieces
    ASL Info:    14/f
    Elite Ratio:    1.92 - 9/16/17
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 792
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsi can't take it anymore.dots

    what can i say?
    idn wat to say nemore
    i can't take it anymore
    here i am, going crazy over you
    but it doesnt matter
    your over me.

    cryin every single night
    theyre all jst sleepless nites
    wen i do get to sleep
    youre in all of my dreams
    everywhere i look
    im reminded of you

    your all that i think
    n what kills me inside
    is that im not the girl in ur life
    the memories of us two,
    are all jst in the past

    theres no future with us two
    so ill treasure those memories
    because now, thats the closest ill get to you.
    i hope youre life is goin good
    who cares about mine.
    i don't even care,
    because ure not in it...

    Submitted on 2006-09-23 23:42:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good write keep it up

    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by brokenbylove | [ Reply to This ]
      is it free verse the style you were writing in?

    its actually, the issue your poem discusses i could relate to and im sure many other peopl could as well its well presented in a manner in which is so well known. broken/hearted am i right? brought back old memories for me and im tough one to crack so kudo's to you and nice job

    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by naynay9_90 | [ Reply to This ]

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