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    dots Submission Name: beauty in heavendots

    Author: naynay9_90
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 13/2/10
    Words: 1714
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 515
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       this song goes out to my soul mte adam who left and my life hasnt been the same but i no in our hearts we'll meet again because our love is too strong to break...

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    dotsbeauty in heavendots

    oh, im going to soar
    im going to take it higher
    higher than ive ever been
    its because of you
    i dont need to try so hard,
    try so hard to fit in
    cos when i see you face it hits a place that i call home
    and theres no second guess for you its who i love
    oh they said there was no beauty in heaven
    but baby they were just telling us lies
    cos i found that beauty here in heaven
    and its there when i look in your eyes

    chorusx1 oh beauty in heaven
    the way the light shines there your the angel of essensce you are with me everywhere

    we cant give up
    we beat with the same heart and weve been through too many years just to throw it away i just cant believe
    its taken me soo long
    to find ..to find the words to say but if i had the choice
    id do it all again because baby
    this is how i feel chorusx1
    chorusx1 prolonged
    beauty of heaven the way the light shines there your the angel of essensce your with me everywhere my heart beats for you my soul shines on through my life has more meaning when im with youooooo......
    oh beauty of heaven i have to thank the god above cos tonight ill give you all my love beauty of heaven, shines there in your eyes for me to see

    Submitted on 2006-09-24 01:33:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey cheers, bout that comment ill take it into account.... i gues im not a punctuation fan ... sorry
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by naynay9_90 | [ Reply to This ]
      Although this was sad, and you managed to put in great emotion behind this, I felt that this could be improved:

    - This lacked basic punctuation; which made it annoying to read
    - Writing 'chorus x 1' wouldn;t be necessary. If you needed it more than once then you could just copy-paste it

    Otherwise, this had a genuine message but the presentation could be greatly improved. Welcome to the site

    | Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

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