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    dots Submission Name: I Love It When You Smokedots

    Author: DBC
    ASL Info:    21/m/ar
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 55/59/29
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Love It When You Smokedots

    i love it when you smoke

    blow it in my face you'll be the first to croak

    every time i think of cancer i think of the color brown

    soon you'll be brown my friend

    soon you'll be digging in the transplant bin

    you'll wonder if this is the end

    you'll beg to die quickly but you'll have the pleasure of watching yourself slowly decay

    i'll laugh and brag about my pink lungs

    while you lick your lips to moisten your cancer stained gums

    i love it when you smoke

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      Heyyy, I remember this. It's one of the best things I've ever read. And you know, I still think of it from time to time while I slowly inhale the road to cancer... which is disgusting, but I don't really mind.

    Anyway, I'm not going to repeat everything I already said in my last comment. I just staggered upon this and figured I'd mention how much I still love it.

    Very very nicely done.

    -nikkki (liv2lovethepain)
    | Posted on 2007-11-18 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, this made me sick, and I really wish I didn't smoke. Yay for me though, I'm attempting to quit. Wish me luck, and great write, you really got your point across.

    | Posted on 2006-12-06 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      I couldn't agree more... and you said it perfectly. The wording and everything is wonderful.

    For some reason, the line "soon you'll be digging in the transplant bin" stuck out the most for me. I've never heard that before. You're very creative.

    I can give ya nothing but compliments.
    It's nice to finally read something great on this site again. Lately it's been mostly "Hi, I'm angsty and I hate my life." (I know some people like that, but it's just not for me.) You know?

    Annnyway, Good stuff

    | Posted on 2006-11-02 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a smoker, unfortunately, and I agree a 100% with what ur saying here. Wish I had pink lungs so I could laugh, but do keep in mind that smoking is addidictive, but not impossible to stop, I'm trying right now. Love this piece, I think it'll help in my ciggarette rehab. thanks
    | Posted on 2006-09-26 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]

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