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    dots Submission Name: A light rain fallsdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsA light rain fallsdots
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    The hammer of night descends with a solid thump,
    waking the moon to peer blearily
    from his baleful bloodshot eye.
    A dieldrin sigh of sorrows moans on
    a restless bending wind.

    Flowers with sucking mouths, cling to flesh gone
    cold.
    An artist mourns...
    quaint tragedy in desolation,
    forsaken reclining queerly shaken.
    A light rain falls, glazed eyes stare at blue-black-ceiling--
    seeing nothing at all.
    Long gleaming wetly red... impaled in mind,
    a void chilled by venom.

    Scorpions skitter away.

    A light rain falls on marble flesh. Agoraphobia
    in the agora?
    Nothing makes sense.
    What relevance is there in monuments or trees?
    An artist will never speak again.
    Does simplicity lie in preaching to the choir?
    Perhaps it lies in a box of deteriorating flesh,
    something everyone should understand.
    Creeping in slivered shadows
    life is uncertain,

    quivers

    with the leeches throbbing.
    Maggots thrive on the rotten parts,
    gnawing at the corners of consciousness
    maggots could after all...
    save a life.

    Does this city have a name?
    Some accursed cry?
    What maniacal imagination could name this crumbling ruin.
    The afterbirth of melted minarets
    frosted with splinters of fractured bones
    garnished with the occasional
    bleached skull.

    Reeking still with the miasma of ancient blood rites
    echoes of life
    or some nameless horror that still haunts the night.
    The cold comes in stealth, stealing in
    with it's evil grin.

    A light rain falls bringing with it the beginning
    blackness
    of
    desolate-eternity.




    Submitted on 2006-09-24 03:42:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i loved this ine! especially the second and third stanzas, it was just so scattered, but in an interesting and different way that just somehow made sense in a sort of indescribable way....i'm not too sure how else to word that...but it's being faved

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    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed the first 2 stanzas the best--'Flowers with sucking mouths...Long gleaming wetly red,' is descriptive, freshly. The images come forth almost as if watching a silent film. Very nicely done here. As always, the vocab. is intense. What does the word dieldrin mean? As throughout 'a light rain falls,' there seems to be a soothig effect as well--past the dark of night. This unfolds, also, somewhat like a mini-story; the rite of Life?
    | Posted on 2006-10-04 00:00:00 | by metalnymph | [ Reply to This ]


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