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    dots Submission Name: Written in scars sevendots
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    Author: D.C.M.
    ASL Info:    18/M/TN.
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 73/110/77
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 673
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 694



    Description:
       Part 7 hope you like it, its kind of forced for some odd reason. Probably because not in the mood to write but... oh well... it helps get the story told.


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    dotsWritten in scars sevendots
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    A new day comes.
    The boy begans his tears.
    For fear she had told his secret.

    He walks into class with buterflys.
    He almost skips class.
    But the door knob turns

    The door is open.
    And she sees his eyes.
    A friendly wave comes to both their brains.

    He says "I love you." as he sits.
    That anoying person in the back of the room.
    The one yelling "Are you two dateing yet?"

    Anoys them both but they let it go.
    They simply smile and respond.
    "No. we have our reasons."

    Theres the bell.
    Here we go.
    I love you too!




    Submitted on 2006-09-24 06:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is rather interesting... I like it though... It seems like a movie in some odd way... It brought back a memory for me as well... But it's good...
    lizzie
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
      this is unusually written, but it reminds me and my best friend... its amazing how others writings can trigger memories ... thank you
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by naynay9_90 | [ Reply to This ]


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