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Praying that he still feels


Author: Lynda
ASL Info:    26/F
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Praying that he still feels



I long for my arms to be around him
For him to know that he's safe and loved
I miss his crooked smile and gangly walk
I miss his bright eyes and his laughter
I stare at the same pictures at night
And wonder what he is thinking
I wonder if he'll be the same emotional little boy that I love
Or a new man sans all feelings
I count down the minutes to his arrival
And pray that war has not changed him
I pray that war has made a stronger person
But not a warrior
I hope he still cries, that he still laughs
That he still loves others as we love him




Submitted on 2006-09-24 19:18:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is very touching. it is heartbreaking when the ones you love have to leave for these reasons. i feel you're anxious for their safe return, but also a little nervous about who he has become.
i like this poem, it's nice and easy to read, and protrays great emotion.
well done.
whirl**
| Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  A wonderful write about the true and real feelings of what family, loved ones and friends feel about the return of coming home from war. With no hesitation we want them to return. We also fear the change it has had on them as it most certainly will have made a change. Thank you for sharing this piece and as you continue to write with feeling and expression, I have learned through experience that the subject will change, but the benifit of writing your feelings down and sharing it will never change the impact it will have on you and the readers! Thank you again.....phoenix sun
| Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by phoenix sun | [ Reply to This ]
  You know, I think this is a very good piece. I have several family members who are in the military or have been in the past, and it's true, war DOES change a person... not any small changes, either. I hope that the person you are referring to hasn't become numb to the impoverished world and still knows sympathy and compassion.
| Posted on 2006-09-24 00:00:00 | by black_beauty18 | [ Reply to This ]


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