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    dots Submission Name: Forlorndots

    Author: Qwayzeri
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I have fallen down
    And am surprised
    I look around
    Yet see no holes
    I may be blind.

    I finally am focused
    But all else isn't clear
    You're all that I need
    And all that I see
    And that's what I fear.

    I've sought out to find you
    All these years I couldn't wait
    Another goal each time
    Yet you never kept your shape
    In the thoughts that I'd create.

    I seem to grow older
    As you come newer every time
    And though I miss the one before
    I'll happily settle, gladly
    Just to see you become mine.

    I keep my distance cautiously
    I do not hunt so loudly
    And as I lure you closer
    With promise of new faith
    I hold the bait up proudly.

    I am your trapper
    And your best friend
    You shall prance for me, sweet deer
    And while our parting does creep near
    As it comes, I'll sense its end.

    Your buds have yet to blossom
    Yet your colors I know shrewdly
    And must I drain to quench your thirst
    I'll wither,
    For I see your true beauty.

    I'll be your ground
    But will you ever see me?
    And will your petals ever show?
    Or will you just look down...
    Knowing that I'll never grow?

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